44楼lc4601
(平安健康)
发表于 2009-12-15 17:24
只看此人
不二的每篇文章,我都反复读过,粘贴在记事本里再研究
小学生英语写句的新帖子,真是及时雨,正为这事困惑,想听听不二的专业指点
儿子5年级,每天听原版录音,看原版片,哈利波特读到第6部,这几个月开始在电脑上写点短文,兴趣颇高,平时作业多,时间很晚了,还想写,我不让.
他很有主见,曾用不二提供的方法,要他学着写,也在网上下了国外小孩子的作文题目,要他写,他认为不自由,不好写,宁愿想到哪写到哪,爱怎么写怎么写.我觉得这样让他自己发挥是不是会局限在自己的框框里,进步慢呢?又或者容易导致中式英语?
放上儿子的短文,想听听不二的指导,谢谢!
Star War
Chapter Three Alains
At last the 509 team’s tent was found, in lay three skeletons, and the radio was smashed. We had found that all the skeleton’s skull was smashed, and the bones were cracked, in it we had found two small metal balls which must been shot in by guns or something.
Just then an alarm broke out, the alains were attacking!!
They attacked us with guns, tanks and planes and so on. We attacked back fiercely, and the alains were no match for us, so they retreated.
Chapter Eleven
The last hope
Soon the young Jedi grew up, and his father and mother was killed in a fire disaster, so he lived alone.
As Ou Bi Wang found out that he is a Jedi, he immediately introduced the young Sky waker ( that is the young Jedi’s name) to master You Ta.
You Ta trained the young Jedi carefully.The trained Jedi joined in the army that attack the Sith, Sky waker began an edventure with Ou Bi Wang and found out that the dack Jedi was his father.
Chapter Twelve
The destroy of the Death Star
The Death Star is a well known man-made star, I do not Know how to built it but, I know that the Death Star is built for one reason: that is the base for the sith.
It seems that there is no way to destroy it, but the good forces must destroy it, so they thinked and thinked, at last they found out that a big hole connect the outer-world to the heart of the Star, and they went to attack it..