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原帖由 小虎快跑 于 2010-3-15 08:56 发表
Yesterday I went to the school. I met my classmate. They’re all looked happy. And we were all exciting to met each other again. We chated with each other loudly. So our classteacher had a conversatio ...

Mi已经能熟练地运用一些从句和分词短语做句子成分来进行写作了，条理也比较清楚。如果内容能多一些，就更好了。另外，语法也要注意。
Yesterday I went to the school（改：Yesterday I went to school.） I met my
classmates（这里可以加同位语写具体一点Mike,jim,and Andy). They’re all looked happy（They all looked happy）. And we were all excited to met each other again. （这里可以加些对话：如Hi,Mike,have you seen the film "xxxx"?等等，可以展开来写，就比较活泼了，就跟写语文作文一样，不难，对不？）We chated with each other loudly. So our classteacher had a conversation with us about being quiet in class and how to keep quiet（能详细点么？试试看）.

[ 本帖最后由 嘟嘟虎妈 于 2010-3-15 23:03 编辑 ].

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原帖由 小虎快跑 于 2010-3-15 08:57 发表
I had a trip with my friends last summer. We went to see a Art exhibition.

The sun on that day looked like it wanted the earth to burn. We were so happy to got（go) into the museum. It’s cool and quiet ...

I had a good trip with my friends last summer. We went to see an Art exhibition.

The sun on that day looked like it wanted the earth to burn(The sun seemed to burn the earth). We were so happy to got(go) into the museum. It’s cool and quiet. We were there to saw（see) an Art exhibition about the drawings which had won the national “I’m a little Artist” competition.

The drawings there were not only beautiful, but also had the  wonderfull imaginations(The drawings there not only were  beautiful, but also had the  wonderfull imaginations of children’s). We all wondered at the imaginations. All of us are good at Art. But here when we stood in frount of the drawings. We all thought we were  mushrooms.

When we saw all  the drawings, I wondered to draw a good picture, not only had to paint well, but also you have to put your heart in it.(改：When we saw all of the drawings,I wondered that a good picture not only was painted well,but also was put one's heart into it).
注意，NOT ONLY。。。。 BUT ALSO。。。连接的句子成分要一致
PUT ONE'S HEART INTO 全神贯注于。。。。
另外，DRAWING和PAINTING是有区别的，前者做可数名词用时，一般只素描画或线条画，没有色彩的，做不可数名词用时，指绘画艺术，后者PAINTING有色彩
Go for it,Mi!

[ 本帖最后由 嘟嘟虎妈 于 2010-3-16 10:41 编辑 ].

我相信，经过一段时间的练习，MI会越来越棒。我们学英语的目的，是要自主地表达。我们目前的短处都在写作上，我觉得是要鼓励孩子多写，哪怕一篇文章里全是废话，也没有关系。目前的问题，不是怕内容多，而是怕象挤牙膏一样的觉得写不出东西。.