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作者: frank妈妈 时间: 2007-6-25 10:33 标题: 快来点评原味"读后感"

昨日买了几本Freddy的书,Freddy是个和Frank差不多大的男孩.Frank昨晚看了半本,今早继续看完了一本,应我的要求写了篇东西,我没有帮他改过.请大家帮忙看看点评鼓励一下孩子!

[ 本帖最后由 frank妈妈于 2007-6-25 13:20 编辑 ].

作者: 吱吱妈 时间: 2007-6-25 14:15 标题: 回复 #1 frank妈妈的帖子

三年级的FRANK能写出这样英语读后感,真了不起！故事叙述得很清楚，也很有条理，PLan A和PLan B 简明清晰.还能归纳出主题思想，不简单。FRANK已经建立了良好的语感,能自由运用语言表达想法了 ,孩子学语言的潜力真是无可限量的 .

继续努力!.

作者: KITTY004 时间: 2007-6-25 15:23

我觉得很棒,

回去再让我家宝宝拜读一下,写一下读"读后感"给FRANK.

作者: 不二周助 时间: 2007-6-25 18:46 标题: 回复 #1 frank妈妈的帖子

Well done! Fantastic writing, using adj. and past tense..

作者: frank妈妈 时间: 2007-6-25 20:29

孩子自己动手修改了一下,以下是二稿:
                                                                     Book Review
Section:Fiction                Title:Tooth Trouble          Author:Abby Klein             Publishing house:Schoolastic
This story is about a boy named Freddy. He was the only one who hadn't lost a tooth. Since his best friend,Robbie, had lost a tooth, he became the only one who hadn't lost a tooth.
Freddy was very sad, and he couldn't even eat his dinner calmly. When his sister, Suzzie knew this, she said that she could let his stupid little tooth came out of his mouth. But Freddy and some of his relatives negate thi-s. In a hopeless situation, Freddy used his secrect weapon, Plan A, "Tape attack".
Freddy went into Suzzie's room, and used Suzzie's tape to pull his tooth out of his mouth, but he failed.
As Freddy wasn't an effete boy, he tried Plan B, "A stupid fight".
Freddy argued with the biggest bully in the first grade, Max deliberately, and after the arguement, he was v-ery happy, for one of his tooth would came out of his mouth by Max's stout fist. But in fact, Max didn't hit his mouth, he hit Freddy's stomach! How pathetic, I couldn't even think about it.
Freddy gave up.
Just on that night, while Freddy was eating a strawberry ice-cream, a miracle happened, one of his tooth fe-lll into his mouth by itself. Freddy's wish came true, he would never ever heared others' ridicule.
This story told us that if you thought you were hopless, just keep trying, don't be destroyed by any bad o-r  disgusting things, go ahead, the dawn of triumph would appear very soon.

(The end.)

[ 本帖最后由 frank妈妈于 2007-6-25 20:37 编辑 ].

作者: KITTY004 时间: 2007-6-26 08:44

昨天我家宝宝说看得太累,今天就有打印版了

,发现两个小的语法错误:" she said that she could let his stupid little tooth came out of his mouth"和 "for one of his tooth would came out of his mouth by Max's stout fist. " came 好象应该改成come ,总的来说,写得不错!继续努力.

作者: frank妈妈 时间: 2007-6-26 09:05 标题: 回复 #6 KITTY004 的帖子

谢谢kitty!.

作者: StarBugs 时间: 2007-7-3 16:52 标题: 同一本书的书评。

Student_Name: Anthony Sands
Grade:       2nd
Book_Title: tooth Trouble
author:    Abby Klein
Date:       Tuesday, November 07, 2006
Time:       06:35:02 PM

Book_Description:

I like Tooth Trouble because it a nice story. It is very interesting to read Ready Freddy books. The special thing about Ready Freddy books are that they have the same characters in every Ready Freddy book. Freddy has friends and family. His friends names are Jessie, Robbie, Chloe, and Max. Freddy has a sister, a mom and, a dad. Abby Klein wrote nine books of Ready Freddy. In Tooth Trouble Freddy was trying to get his tooth out like everybody else. Freddy strugled to get his tooth out quickly. Finaly Freddy got his tooth out like everybody else. You should check this book out at the library, to find all Freddy tryed to get his tooth out..

作者: 不二周助 时间: 2007-7-5 07:03 标题: 回复 #8 StarBugs 的帖子

谁写的？是NATIVE SPEAKER 写的吗？看起来还像是低年级的NATIVE SPEAKER。
Good job..

作者: StarBugs 时间: 2007-7-5 18:14

二年级。因为见过Frank，找个年级相仿的作参考。.

作者: shuaishuaimm 时间: 2007-7-5 19:26

Frank真棒!小小年纪就能写那么好的英语,赞一个!.

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