Well done! Fantastic writing, using adj. and past tense.. 作者: frank妈妈 时间: 2007-6-25 20:29
孩子自己动手修改了一下,以下是二稿:
Book Review
Section:Fiction Title:Tooth Trouble Author:Abby Klein Publishing house:Schoolastic
This story is about a boy named Freddy. He was the only one who hadn't lost a tooth. Since his best friend,Robbie, had lost a tooth, he became the only one who hadn't lost a tooth.
Freddy was very sad, and he couldn't even eat his dinner calmly. When his sister, Suzzie knew this, she said that she could let his stupid little tooth came out of his mouth. But Freddy and some of his relatives negate thi-s. In a hopeless situation, Freddy used his secrect weapon, Plan A, "Tape attack".
Freddy went into Suzzie's room, and used Suzzie's tape to pull his tooth out of his mouth, but he failed.
As Freddy wasn't an effete boy, he tried Plan B, "A stupid fight".
Freddy argued with the biggest bully in the first grade, Max deliberately, and after the arguement, he was v-ery happy, for one of his tooth would came out of his mouth by Max's stout fist. But in fact, Max didn't hit his mouth, he hit Freddy's stomach! How pathetic, I couldn't even think about it.
Freddy gave up.
Just on that night, while Freddy was eating a strawberry ice-cream, a miracle happened, one of his tooth fe-lll into his mouth by itself. Freddy's wish came true, he would never ever heared others' ridicule.
This story told us that if you thought you were hopless, just keep trying, don't be destroyed by any bad o-r disgusting things, go ahead, the dawn of triumph would appear very soon.
昨天我家宝宝说看得太累,今天就有打印版了,发现两个小的语法错误:" she said that she could let his stupid little tooth came out of his mouth"和 "for one of his tooth would came out of his mouth by Max's stout fist. " came 好象应该改成come ,总的来说,写得不错!继续努力. 作者: frank妈妈 时间: 2007-6-26 09:05 标题: 回复 #6 KITTY004 的帖子
Student_Name: Anthony Sands
Grade: 2nd
Book_Title: tooth Trouble
author: Abby Klein
Date: Tuesday, November 07, 2006
Time: 06:35:02 PM
Book_Description:
I like Tooth Trouble because it a nice story. It is very interesting to read Ready Freddy books. The special thing about Ready Freddy books are that they have the same characters in every Ready Freddy book. Freddy has friends and family. His friends names are Jessie, Robbie, Chloe, and Max. Freddy has a sister, a mom and, a dad. Abby Klein wrote nine books of Ready Freddy. In Tooth Trouble Freddy was trying to get his tooth out like everybody else. Freddy strugled to get his tooth out quickly. Finaly Freddy got his tooth out like everybody else. You should check this book out at the library, to find all Freddy tryed to get his tooth out.. 作者: 不二周助 时间: 2007-7-5 07:03 标题: 回复 #8 StarBugs 的帖子